Tongue Pimples
would you like to read a poem of passion?
Sweet Dreams Dreaming with eyes open feelings of tenderness surrounding me Good bumps from my toes to my nose like I'm in the arms of someone holding me close, whispering in my ear soft words that thrill Gently lying me down and coverying my body with his own Holding my face, looking into my eyes so deeply Softly kissing the tip of my nose then unbuttoning my blouse and softly gliding his tongue across my neck I shiver with excitemet as passion fills my senses Piece by piece our clothes disappear until there is nothing between us but our nude bodies Slowly I respond and the passion increases Soft gentle love making that turns into fierce passion Passion to explosive that we are taken away Away to a place where sweet dreams live The touch, the kiss, the smell all belong there for sweet dreams are for love, passion and being one Nothing to interfere, nothing to stop the love, only sweet dreams that live in a world of their own.
Public Comments
- wow... its been a long night. And for the 3247234720437th time! PUNCTUATION. you need punctuation! Just like a million other ppl in here. And you need to work on your flow. The meaning is good... and word choice is good. But you need to work on punct. and flow. sorry if i seem mean, i'm usually not. It's just been a lonngg night.
- very nice dear....me being a guy even like that one
- Nice imagery, very readable, smooth...you get an "A" also...
- I disagree with the recommendation for punctuation. It is not always necessary, but your poem doesn't really demonstrate any style other than "stream of consciousness", which is sophomoric and unimaginative. There is no symbolism or any need for the reader to draw any conclusions that are not clearly written on the page. There is no soul in the work and no real glimpse into exactly who you are or what love is, other than some snogging and a little horny. Read some more and give it another try.
